The lonely man walked miles to find the right place to dig to find a mysterious egg! People wondered why he would want to find an egg. But it was no ordinary egg, It was a Golden egg birthed by a mother Goose! The man dug grounds himself with his bare hands. After hours of searching for the egg, there were over 18 holes in the ground. But then he found a huge nest. He grabbed it, pulled it to the surface, and looked inside of it. But there was nothing. He wondered if it was in a cave guarded by its mother. So he set off again to look for the mysterious Golden eggs.
July 6th, 1988.
The lonely man walked 20 miles and then drove 14 miles with a car he found on the side of a bush. Then finally he found a cave. but it was on a very tall mountain surrounded by spiky thorns. So he decided to climb and make sure he kept the eggs hidden. After hours of climbing, he finally reached the cave and he peeked inside the cave to see if it was there and it was! They were so shiny like a coin! He rushed over to the eggs and lifted them up close to his chest. He knew that if he took it back to the city, people would want to take it because they thought it was not real. So he planned to keep it hidden and close to him.
July 7th, 1988.
The lonely man wasn't lonely anymore. He knew that he would have pet Gooses. He drove 13 miles back but when he was driving he heard a crack. He stopped the car almost making the eggs jump out of the back seat. He looked back at the eggs and heard another crack. He lifted up the nest and looked closely at the eggs. He was excited because they were going to hatch and he would have friends!
Hi Alofa, My name is Ruta and I from Waikowhai Primary school. Amazing story and I really like how you added a man with eggs in his hands. Your writing is so good and I liked how you added a good title called '' Magical eggs.'' Maybe next time you could add picture of friends and just himself so that they know what the story is mainly about.
ReplyDeleteGreat job overall and if you want to visit my blog go to http://wpsrutal.blogspot.com/
Thanks a lot for sharing your learning with me !
Thank you Ruta for your feedback on my story! I will try to put some photos of friends to go together with my story!
DeleteKia ora, Alofa my name is Sulaiman from Room 24. Your story is really good
ReplyDeleteI like how you added the days and the years it's cool and interesting. The ending makes me happy because I thought that the eggs cracked cause the driver did it. Like your story Alofa come check out my blog
Thank you Sulaiman for commenting some feedback about my "Magical Eggs" story. I'll be checking out your blog soon!
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